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Sat, Jun. 3rd, 2006, 06:01 pm

The Pain of Saying Good bye by Senya Lady of the Serpents smacks of self-insert for a number of reasons. When the author gives Hermione (a Voldemort's-Daughter Sue, with an Evil Twin Sister as a bonus) the middle name "Risika" and then signs her chapter with the same name, there's obviously an act of self-insertion being perpetrated. However, the fact that she reels off a random list of more than fifteen extraneous friends - I couldn't be bothered check exactly how many - seems to me to either indicate a rather OTT level of connection with the character (and given that it's a Muggle-torturing Death Eater Hermione, that worries me somewhat) to the point of dragging ALL the people she knows along for the ride... or else, she's a bit lonely and would like to have a large group of friends.

Either way, I'm not madly impressed with the author. I mean, I was out with Kathy, Moira, Sue, Mark, Joey, Lea, Peter, Tony, Michael, Adam J, Neil, Aoife, Keith, Zac, Saidhbh, Eleanor, Sandra, Zoe, Sally, Sarah, Jenny, Etain, Carl, Kev, *gasp* and Sophie and her fiancee whose name I forget last night, and you don't see me bragging.

Also, she uses the word "expspecially" on her bio. 'Nuff rambling from me.

Edit: Also Denis. How could I have left him out?


From the author's bio: I love Harry Potter Stories, expspecially DM/HG, HP/GW, and a very pissed Pansey!!!!!

WIll people be able to forgive after betrayle? Why are there so many new slyhterins?

“First of all Eddie, my name is not Jennifer Leigh McClure but in reality it is Hermione Risika Granger. I live in England, but I am here for the summer. I in truth go to a school in England where people accept me more. SO you know what. Fuck you. Fuck DHMS! FUCK IT ALL!” she yelled as she walked towards the doors of the school with her backpack in hand.

“But Jen, what about our high school dreams?” Kristi asked with a look of hrt evident in her eyes.

“Don’t freak out. You’ve become like my brother.” She pulled away, whipping her eyes.

As she walked off, all her friends came out. Derek, Alex, Ty, Sam, Megan, Dorota, Sami, Erica, Christian, Cody, Chris, Ali, Jasmine, Elaina, and Emily appeared. She stopped as Tori, Ty, Megan, Sam, Dorota, Lindsay, Chris, Ali, Derek, Alex, Erica, and Sami all began to sing a familiar song.

Chapter Two: New death eaters and old friends

“Yes, just get on with it!” a voice from the new death eaters hissed. She walked towards the voice, and began chocking him.
“Risssika—Mione—Jennifer McClure put him down thisss inssstant!” Voldemort yelled. She dropped him at the sound of her old name. It brought many funny memories, and somewhere painful.

"... Let us begin the party. Bring in the muggles!” she yelled.

Sat, Jun. 3rd, 2006 05:51 pm (UTC)
wanttobeatree

Why are there so many new slyhterins?

A question we all want the answer to...

And also 'where is the Harry Potter in this?' O.o

Sat, Jun. 3rd, 2006 05:52 pm (UTC)
semi_subtle

Sam, not to be confused with Sami.

This is the possibly the worst thing I've ever read. Kill me please. XD

Sat, Jun. 3rd, 2006 05:56 pm (UTC)
lied_ohne_worte

As she walked off, all her friends came out. Derek, Alex, Ty, Sam, Megan, Dorota, Sami, Erica, Christian, Cody, Chris, Ali, Jasmine, Elaina, and Emily appeared. She stopped as Tori, Ty, Megan, Sam, Dorota, Lindsay, Chris, Ali, Derek, Alex, Erica, and Sami all began to sing a familiar song.

You know what puzzles me: Apparently Christian, Cody, Jasmine, Elaina, and Emily can't sing, while Tori and Lindsay appeared out of nowhere. Oh, I'm jealous: The Sue has so many friends that she totally loses overview of the situation.

Sat, Jun. 3rd, 2006 08:35 pm (UTC)
kelseyg

It brought many funny memories, and somewhere painful.

Funny, that's how I feel reading this!

Sat, Jun. 3rd, 2006 09:04 pm (UTC)
quasiadastra

“Yes, just get on with it!” a voice from the new death eaters hissed. She walked towards the voice, and began chocking him.
“Risssika—Mione—Jennifer McClure put him down thisss inssstant!” Voldemort yelled. She dropped him at the sound of her old name. It brought many funny memories, and somewhere painful.


So she sticks him in a coffee can (you know, Chock Full o' Nuts coffee? I think that's what its called...)?

What is with hissing Voldemort?! Voldemort does not hiss in the books, so whyyyyyyyyy do fan fic writers insist on having him hiss in their fics?

Sat, Jun. 3rd, 2006 10:32 pm (UTC)
nochi_san

whipping her eyes

Whip it good?

Sun, Jun. 4th, 2006 01:43 am (UTC)
lexie_b

Fuck you. Fuck DHMS! FUCK IT ALL!”
Fuck y'all and this popsicle stand!

“First of all Eddie, my name is not Jennifer Leigh McClure
What WERE you thinking, Eddie?

This, kids, is what happens when a Sue Author attempts to have an independent thought... her brain explodes all over the internet.

Sun, Jun. 4th, 2006 08:36 am (UTC)
hourlily

I love how she takes the time to list every extra's name. What's wrong with calling them a "large group of friends?"

Wed, Jun. 7th, 2006 10:28 pm (UTC)
isawthreeships

A look of HRT? What, were her eyes hot and flushed and sprouting woman moustaches?

Tue, Jul. 25th, 2006 02:03 am (UTC)
jpgr09

She pulled away, whipping her eyes.


I keep seeing this. But the first time it was "wipping". those HP characters must have sore eyes by the end of an emotional day.